These are looking nice! I like that you're using some variation of tone in your boards.
I'm not really sure where anyone is in space though. It seems a little disjointed, like the main character exists in one place and the other army exists in another place... it's almost confusing until they come together. maybe it would be good to show a wide shot of the setting so we can see both armies from far away, or even show an over-the-shoulder shot of what the boy's looking at so we can see how far away the other army is. Maybe Justin has some suggestions on that front too.
Anyway, looking epic! Keep going, I'm excited to see what happens! -Sarah Cotton
These are looking nice! I like that you're using some variation of tone in your boards.
ReplyDeleteI'm not really sure where anyone is in space though. It seems a little disjointed, like the main character exists in one place and the other army exists in another place... it's almost confusing until they come together. maybe it would be good to show a wide shot of the setting so we can see both armies from far away, or even show an over-the-shoulder shot of what the boy's looking at so we can see how far away the other army is. Maybe Justin has some suggestions on that front too.
Anyway, looking epic! Keep going, I'm excited to see what happens!
-Sarah Cotton