Yes, good characterization even at this rough stage. We're getting the characters' reactions and emotions, which are essential to the story. A few of the frames are less clear, but I think all of these concepts have potential. The third one might be the most challenging because you're dealing with a 2-way dialog, which can become repetitive. But it's in important problem to learn how to solve. Which one do you want to dive into first?
I guess my main concern is I don't quite know how the two men talking relate to the first 2/3 of the page. Are they in the same house? It's too rough to be able to understand that yet. In general, I think you may need to put a few more boards in between the ones you have to clarify things just a little. But I will say that middle row is nice. It works on its own to describe the action well.
Those shots of the raccoon taking a bath are especially nice.
ReplyDeleteYes, good characterization even at this rough stage. We're getting the characters' reactions and emotions, which are essential to the story. A few of the frames are less clear, but I think all of these concepts have potential. The third one might be the most challenging because you're dealing with a 2-way dialog, which can become repetitive. But it's in important problem to learn how to solve. Which one do you want to dive into first?
ReplyDeleteI guess my main concern is I don't quite know how the two men talking relate to the first 2/3 of the page. Are they in the same house? It's too rough to be able to understand that yet. In general, I think you may need to put a few more boards in between the ones you have to clarify things just a little. But I will say that middle row is nice. It works on its own to describe the action well.
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